IELTS ACADEMIC Sample

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

ACADEMIC | CUSTOM

Undoubtedly, in this phenomenon there are many development towards agriculture sector, somehow advanced farming is not fully accepted in every part of the world. Thus, many people sleeping hungry even today. In this essay, I will discuss not only why this occured but also solution about the same. The primary reason of this happing is cost of the products. In many areas of the word advance farming is treated as harmful farming. People thinks that it is not pure and natural way to farm. As a result, the rate of farming product will increase because of limited stock. Moreover, pollution is also one of the fector which is responsible for this. Naturally unstable sessons is not give a room to the product to grow. For instance, if rain comes in the summer, will mass the whole farming of summer fruits and vegetables.So that, a small amount of stock will not fulfill whole demand. On the other hand, to solve this issue the governments of the nations should import the lacking product to feed every people and export some access stock which is no more needed in their country to help others. In addition, the process of advanced farming must be teach to every farmers at some part of the country. Farmers are unaware about this. For instance, with hybrid bees fruits can grow in just a month, which take six months with natural farming. In conclusion, although a math about advance farming and shortage of stock can be a cause, it should be solve by awaring farmer and with the policies of import export.

  • Task Achievement: 5
  • Coherence And Cohesion: 4
  • Lexical Resource: 5
  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 4

Feedback:

The essay touches on relevant issues but lacks focus. While it attempts to explain the reasons for hunger, it fails to present a clear and concise argument. The solutions are too broad and lack specificity. The writing is repetitive and uses overly simplistic language.

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