IELTS GENERAL Sample TASK2

Many people believe that participating in team sports helps to develop good character and values in children. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Provide reasons and examples to support your answer.

GENERAL | TASK2

In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue that participation of children in sport's team helps them to build good character and values. There is no iota of doubt over the issue that sports helps children to grow mentally as well as physically. A majority of society favors it, however the rest opposes it. The following paragraph would highlight my perspective which will leads a logical conclusion.

According to the statement, I see eye to eye with the given aspect for multifarious reasons. First and foremost, sport it's represents discipline. For every game, there are bundles of rules and in sports, game should be played by following all the rules which groomed the children perfectly. Additionally, when children play in a team, they interact with their teammates which helps them to develop communication skills. They also learn how to help others whenever they need help from you. Children play together in a team helps them to learn about unity According to me, playing in a team taught children the perfect brotherhood and unity.

Probing ahead, In a team there is a coach who taught their taught the techniques, rules of games and moral values too. Children learn how they give respect to the people who are elder from them. Overall, sports makes children enough strong to live in this society with greats values.

To recapitulate, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supplying that playing in a term helps children to develop good moral valves which cannot be overlooked either.

  • Task Achievement: 6
  • Coherence And Cohesion: 5
  • Lexical Resource: 6
  • Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5

Feedback:

The essay presents a clear opinion and provides relevant supporting points. However, the introduction is overly verbose and lacks a clear thesis statement. The body paragraphs are repetitive and could be more concise. The conclusion is also repetitive. While the vocabulary is generally good, there are instances of awkward phrasing and grammatical errors.

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